I think maybe a little bit more details on what you do in One Act and Bravo would help. It would emphasize even more how exhausted you are if you state what you are doing.
I think a teacher would be a better source rather than a counselor. The lead does a good job in leading me into the story.
The scenes are well described. Between ari at home and at school you almost feel her workload as she does it.
I think some grammar needs fixing otherwise its a really good read.
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